I honestly thought I was finished with this bit, but when I went to post it on Lit I realized that there were a lot of major flaws in the story. So I'm posting as I rewrite.
"You know," Crispin muses, "I think maybe Jay has a crush on LeAndre."
"Quit talking shit." Someone stuck gum on the underside of this desk.
"No, I'm serious," he insists, rummaging in a drawer. "I'm not saying he's gay, just maybe that he has a crush. Like, elementary school style."
I grab the trash can and the scraper from my bag of detention tools. "Come on. Being a homophobe doesn't automatically make him closeted."
"Duh, but look at their relationship. Let's call it a friend crush, or a bro crush. I think Jay really, really wants LeAndre to like him."
"Everybody really wants LeAndre to like them," I reply. "He's the kind of guy who's popular because he's smart and nice to people."
"And hot and good at everything," Crispin adds.
"Right." I stand to stretch my back. "Ugh, I hate this so much."
Crispin comes around the desk. "Sorry, pumpkin," he says cajolingly.
"Don't you 'sorry, pumpkin,' me," I fake growl. "This was your fault."
"Heeeey, queer burger." Jay's voice startles me as he pops around the corner.
Read the rest at https://reamstories.com/acerbicscribbler
Ahhhh the story that lured me into your writing. So happy to log in and see this after the day I've had. Thank you, and I hope you have a happy Christmas! Or whatever you celebrate. :)
ReplyDeleteI got so excited when I saw this posted you have no idea! I love this story!
ReplyDeleteWhen I saw this new chapter, I just had to re-read the first three before reading this. Great story. I love your writing! Hope you continue this further! // Malin
ReplyDeleteI can’t believe I found you again, at last!!! I mourned the loss of your stories for so long, since I used to reread them again and again on Literotica every time I was in a bad mood. And than you disappeared without a word and I JUST found you again after getting suspicious that Acerbicscribbler feels too familiarly good :)
ReplyDeleteSorry, Alice—I didn't intend to remove your comment.
Delete"Watching Him Back" I took directly from the first line of the first chapter. I got tired of watching gays in the media lust after straight jocks all the time. I also got tired of the "star quarterback discovers he is actually gay! Who will he punch next to prove how butch he is?" storyline that seems so prevalent. I wasn't like that and didn't know people like that at age eighteen. Aaron is very good but not the best at sports, in the popular crowd but not at the forefront, intelligent, and very aware of his sexuality. I went from there.
This bit IS short. It isn't a full chapter. I could post other parts I've written, but it will be completely out of chronological order and in a paragraph at a time.
Sorry for the super late reply.
DeleteThat's okay atleast you replied.
It would be nice if you post the other parts you've written since this blogspot is about incomplete parts.
Just wondering how many parts have you written about this story?
Are the characters here inspired by real persons?
Hope you post some more.
Thank you and take care.
There is maybe enough story left for two parts. And no, none of the characters have real life counterparts. I'd have to hang out almost exclusively with assholes; nobody wants to do that.
DeletePretty please post those other parts. Even though theyre just rough drafts for the mean time.
DeleteI hope you create more stories because you write fun stories.
Have you already have an idea on how the story of Watching Him Back end?
You've written a lot of parts for The Bunny story.
DeleteI was hoping you do the same for your other stories too.
Thank you anyway.
One word: patience.
DeleteTwo more words: prom night.
Plus six words: I am not a fast writer.
Still waiting for the story after PROM NIGHT. :-)
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